Ok starting out nice littly catch piano, simple yet effective in setting the vibe of the song. Sounds like a cheesy rap/pop song from the 90s. However right before your voice came in, you hear the background noise from the recording. I recommend putting the recording through a noise filtering algorithm, which is likely built in to a plug-in in your DAW. (in FL you can find this in edison)
I really like the vocal layering you did the verse and chorus, sounds really on point. If I could critique anything in the chorus it would be the 'Yeah Yeah'. It sounds a little flat in comparison to the energy the piano and guitar are giving the song.
The first verse starts suuuper strong. The 'craazy' immediatly diversifies the chorus from the verse and allows the listener to sink into the verse. In fact, the whole first verse was really good. The diversity brought on by the changes in layers in the voice almost gives it a band-with-a-back-up-singer quality.
Then again with the chorus, the song continues it's model of being simple yet effective in conveying it's point.
The second verse in my opinion is somewhat lacking, especially in comparison with the first one. While the transition was good, the background layers in the passage 'I do not ignore, I do not adore this matrix anymore' felt kind of off. This maybe stylistic critique and I don't have an easy answer for how to better it, because removing the background voices is also wrong, I think. Maybe look at the section again?
Second verse finishes we come back into the pre-chorus and the you used the chorus as an outro, which was really cool.
All in all, I really liked this song. It's simple, it's catchy and all around just good vibes! :)
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