Loglines are hard, so be sure to give yourself a break when it comes to those. Loglines need to be short and that means that word choice is EVERYTHING, so I'm going to nitpick that, but understand that word choice is literally more than half the battle with loglines, and I'm not doing it to be negative.
As for this one,
- I'm sort of interested because I like cars, and I like street racing/OG Fast n' Furious vibes, so not a bad call to say it simply like that, though I will talk about how to mention that next
- Be more descriptive with "street racing team". If you preface it with "A streetracer" you can give us more info, because you no longer have to say they are a street racing team, you can describe more of what makes them stay together. Like, as an example(it doesn't follow exactly what I just said but follow me here) "A loner meets a gang of long-time foster siblings who change his life when they introduce him into the world of Underground Street Racing,"
- I don't care about his or anyone's name in this logline. I will in the script, but it's completely wasted in the logline.
- "Darren's Team" doesn't simply aim to cause his team to run from the police. What do they literally do? Do they frame them? Do they rat them out for revenge? What exactly do they do?
- Minnesota is a really big place, it's not enough to just say "Minnesota". Try "Rural" or "Outskirts of St. Paul"/some other city. Be specific.
